-I loved the simplicity of the track in the beginning. Just letting the basic melody repeat a couple of times to get you into things.
-At 1:08 it changed a little but it made it seem darker and deeper. Followed up by the increase in speed about fourty seconds later. It really helped get you out of the monotone beat that you started to get into.
-The drums were overused in my opinion. Just way too much percussion compared to the guitars being used. Especially towards the end of the song. You can keep the drum solo if you had less drums being used in the entire whole of the song.
Sorry, I normally try to reply right away but I didn't notice the reviews..
I greatly appreciate the feedback. As I said I'm going to back and remix the song. I will definitely subdue the drum parts toward the end. I see what you are talking about. I will send you the updated version once I'm done (should be soon).
-This sounds awfully familiar to me. I've either reviewed an earlier version of this or the lyrics have been used somewhere else. Seeing as this is the second version of this song i'm hoping it's the first. I'm honestly too lazy to trudge through my reviews to find out though.
-Well this was actually really good. It thouroughly kept me interested. Even though it still seems a bit repetitive it changes pace and has enough breaks in the melody to keep it interesting and would work great in a club. The way you ended it was by far the best part with the reverberating vocal audio. Just was an interesting tid-bit to send it off with.
-Well it's relaxing but that's really all it has going for it. It's just way too simplistic in nature which is probably what you were going for but it doesn't keep my attention at all. It just progressed way too slow for me to get interested in it which made me not want to listen to it more than once.
-Slow songs are great for certain occasions but they need to have something that just grasps you and pulls you in for the long relaxing ride. You waited way too long to introduce the high pitched melody that was at about 2:40. If it was earlier in the song and progressed from there it would of been better.
-Well if you look at the bright side of things the fact that you have so many (WIP)s just means that eventually you will have a whole lot of finished songs when just the right moment of musical realization comes to you. I find myself doing this same exact thing with most of the random chores or personal objectives I have. As long as you are making some sort of progress and not letting everything sit around and collect dust basically is what i'm trying to get across.
-It was very upbeat and spontaneous for a classical type of song. Not drab and slow like a lot of these random classical reincarnations that you see being created by people nowadays. Just the fact that it was faster paced really intrigued me and made me want to just keep listening to this over and over(faster songs seem to really be what I listen to most of the time). It was very crisp and clean sounding without clipping the sounds off from the instuments. Great choice of intro music.
-Ultimately what made the song as it is now was how you structured it though. Having the beginning come in slowly with the cymbals followed by the piano was pure genius. Just waiting to introduce the drums until the song progressed. It just had a completely continuous flow that just kept getting stronger and stronger. Even though you may think that the transition at 0:44 was lazy the drop off of sound allowed for a resurgence of the piano combined with bass hits. Even after that the volume increased and the melody became even more powerful that it was before. It did end quite abruptly though. A subtle letdown seemed to be in order for this.
-Even though I liked how the drums were first introduced and the additional resurgence of them after the first big transition I just felt they were stale and repetitive otherwise. While you had variation in them in the beginning they quickly became stagnant and continued to rinse and repeat the same pattern over and over. This being said they could use some work and be varied some.
-Overall you've done a good job with nurturing this baby of yours but it will take some time and effort before it can truly blossom into something more.
"Well if you look at the bright side of things the fact that you have so many (WIP)s just means that eventually you will have a whole lot of finished songs when just the right moment of musical realization comes to you."
Heh, well I have loads of different WiP's not because I don't know how to continue them. I can easily spend a completely music-focused day and get every single idea I have (Against The Clock, Battle Theme, New Light, this, and many others I have waiting for me to finish them) with ease, but the problem is I don't have the time. I only make these WiP's so that the musical idea doesn't get locked in my head, since I'll end up forgetting it.
"I find myself doing this same exact thing with most of the random chores or personal objectives I have. As long as you are making some sort of progress and not letting everything sit around and collect dust basically is what i'm trying to get across."
Yeah, I agree with you on that.
"It was very upbeat and spontaneous for a classical type of song. Not drab and slow like a lot of these random classical reincarnations that you see being created by people nowadays."
I really really like Classical songs, although those songs like that don't really interest me either. I usually like the type of songs that Danman87 makes, especially Morning Adventure, Heart of the Winter and With Gun & Crucifix.
"Just the fact that it was faster paced really intrigued me and made me want to just keep listening to this over and over(faster songs seem to really be what I listen to most of the time)."
Same here xD. It's probably why I don't like making ambient :D.
"It was very crisp and clean sounding without clipping the sounds off from the instuments. Great choice of intro music."
Well I still have to admit that the EQing job I did here is terrible, although I'll fix that when this is finished.
"Ultimately what made the song as it is now was how you structured it though. Having the beginning come in slowly with the cymbals followed by the piano was pure genius. Just waiting to introduce the drums until the song progressed. It just had a completely continuous flow that just kept getting stronger and stronger."
That's exactly what I was aiming for :D.
"Even though you may think that the transition at 0:44 was lazy the drop off of sound allowed for a resurgence of the piano combined with bass hits. Even after that the volume increased and the melody became even more powerful that it was before."
Well OK, glad the transition over there is OK for you :). I suppose lazy sometimes works out xD.
"It did end quite abruptly though. A subtle letdown seemed to be in order for this."
It only ends like that because there's more to go :P.
"Even though I liked how the drums were first introduced and the additional resurgence of them after the first big transition I just felt they were stale and repetitive otherwise."
You're right, I'm definitely going to redo them.
"While you had variation in them in the beginning they quickly became stagnant and continued to rinse and repeat the same pattern over and over. This being said they could use some work and be varied some."
I'm not usually one to make drum beats repetitive in my songs; I really don't know what got into me xP.
"Overall you've done a good job with nurturing this baby of yours but it will take some time and effort before it can truly blossom into something more."
Agreed, I'll work on it in the summer along with the other ideas I have ^^.
Anyhow, thanks for the awesome and detailed review! :D
It was a bit repetitive but the upbeat high pitched melody sounded great. The additional clap was a nice touch too. You really put a lot of work into it after the two minute mark though. The constant changes were a nice change of pace from the rest of the song.
-It definitely stays true to your style that I noticed you like to use in your work. It's so much different than other vocalists in how you use a much different pace and it doesn't need to be fluid. It works great in bursts, just like an assault rifle.
-The line at :39 is by far my favorite. It's the whole reason little kids love the internet. Most of what you said is very true though. It's very easy to get lost on the internet once you are on it. One thing leads to another and then you're spending hours a day on there.
-The music is quite interesting. The guitar is suprisingly slow compared to the rest of the beat. It gives it a nice bright contrast that gives an easy listening experience to an otherwise fast paced song.
-It however doesn't really come together as a whole. The music is a bit too loud for the vocals. Try equalizing the sound. Either that or just lower the volume of the background music. It will make it much easier to hear what you are saying.
-Of course serious men would ask serious questions. How else would they become so serious? I was quite suprised this had vocals. I was expecting some random serious music but you did so much better.
-The percussion elements of this song were by far the best i've heard for background music. They could of stood alone. I liked the vocalized style of using bursts of words and breaking it apart. I think it sounds really good and much better than if you would of done it all in one long chunk.
-...you'll never understand what those important issues are. They speak in circles and use fancy words to make it sound like they are doing something important.
Yeah, it's all about taking things too seriously. It's a song about the dangers of intersection and over analyzable. Searching for answers expecting that only good can come from the results. Or speculating about things that can't be answered which results in coming up with your own answers.
Not necessarily a bad thing, humanity has been doing for years.
-Well the quality isn't all that great so I switched from my headphones to my speakers for this one. I don't do that too often since I like my headphones. But i'll make an exception since it's such a unique instrument that I quite frankly would like to hear a lot more of in the audio portal. Too much techno, not enough natural instruments.
-I just love how the marimba reverberates notes so well and allows you to create really dynamic and interesting melodies. This was a must anyways since it's a solo and it's the main focus anyways. You changed the pace from slow to fast and back and forth so many times. That mixed with the changes in volume made it very soothing to the ears. It ebbed and flowed very nicely.
-I really enjoyed listening to this. I even favorited it so I can easily listen to it again. It's just a shame that you don't have a better way to record.
-It has to be difficult for a pimp in space. There aren't exactly too many clients to work with but the ones that are there probably pay high dollar to ride in your ship.
-Very smooth throughout with the synth doing most of the work. The melody has a nice floating in space feel to it. It doesn't change a whole lot but the suttle variations in volume and tone make a big difference. The percussion elements stay almost the same throughout the entire song though. Try mixing them up a bit. The only change that I could notice was at :57.
-It's a good listen overall but it doesn't have a whole lot of variation to it. It's great for background music but as it is now it doesn't do a lot standing by itself.
-I honestly can tell why some people think this isn't an original work and think you are just playing someone elses. The beginning twenty or so seconds sound awfully close to another great classical song but I don't know the name of it. The rest is entirely different though so it should be obvious it's your work.
-Are you using a classical guitar for this? I can't tell if it is one or a newer type of guitar. I'm having an awful time trying to decide if it is or not. Anyway it sounds really good. You mentioned something about construction noise but I guess the edit was uploading another version without it.
-Everything was so calm in the beginning but it eventually picked up and the difficulty of the tabs to be played. I think you did a fine job with writing and following up with the actual play of the song. It's well structured and even though you think it's sloppy it's better than a lot of the stuff i've heard.
-The only thing that I think that could be changed is make it longer. It doesn't need any additonal instruments or anything like that but at a little over a minute and a half it's a small piece. It shouldn't be too difficult to add something to it.
Well, I'm considering making it longer but it's only a minuet. The longest one I can think of is one by Beethoven and it's 2:30. I may do a String Quintet with it though (two violins, viola, cello, guitar).
This is a normal nylon string guitar. Classical guitarist have nails that change the tone of the guitar, so maybe that's why you thought it was something different. Writing this I started with a baseline that goes down the F major scale, so I guess it may kind of remind you of Air.
I just always listen for mistakes instead of listening to the song.
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