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-This would sound so much better if it wasn't so cluttered together. More spacing and progression would lengthen the song but also allow you to introduce different parts at different times while layering it better so everything isn't playing at once.
-I love piano melodies and the ones you have here sound excellent. The snare is very abrasive in comparison to the soft melody and doesn't work well to be honest. I'd love to see more piano but in a simpler song.
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