Ummm
-Either there was some uploading problem or this was mixed awfully. It's distorted the whole way through. I really doubt that was on purpose since it makes it sound so bad. Also what was up with chopping the ending off? There isn't a solid ending to the song. It just abruptly ends and leaves me guessing.
I can't tell if it needs work for the most part though since there is an audio problem as stated before. It's off alignment or has some awful distortion.
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thanks for the review but damnit i already got a review from Review Request Club.
stop
Nice
-The lyrics are great and flow well. Most of the time you sound great but occasionally when you go for longer drawn out notes you sound a bit wobbly and off tune. Try to keep everything concise since you pull of the lyrics so much better when you say them quickly.
-The beat in the background goes well too but it could be interchanged for something else and still sound good.
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Good Job
-Quite an interesting collaborational work. The drum work is excellent in it's own regards and were mixed well even though they are a bit light. Come to think of it the instruments as a whole are very light. I'm guessing lyrical work was planned for this but still needs to be added.
-The only issue I had was with how much use of the cymbals there was. It's probably the pace setter you used but it drones on towards the end. Also the thirty blank seconds at the end. You can trim that stuff off.
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Well right now newgrounds own BIGRED (Tingtonger) is composing the lyrics to this piece .. once i get the lyrical audio in there this is going to get revamped a bit. ill definitely take your cymbal comment into consideration while redoing some stuff. This song will actually be available on the haiti relief album coming out soon. If not the haiti relief album it will be on some sort of charity album.
Thanks for the sweet review man
Lol
-Those vocals are crisp, clean, and quite interesting. Especially the moan towards the end. It definitely needs some snare to give more dimension. It's very repetitive in the instrumental aspects of the song. This could only benefit from being extended and adding some more vocals.
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thx for the review ;D...sry for the HUUUUGE DELAY XD
sadly...lost this flp. too ;S so i cant continue it D;
Not that great
-It's very weak as a whole. It never rose up and did anything spectacular. It only just caught my attention in the last thirty seconds with an almost melody. Mentioning that there isn't a solid melody throughout which it really needed. The drums are very light and repetitive. They need to be brought out more to have any sort of effect.
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Nice Job
-I just love original songs put on here. It takes talent to put together a catchy song that's also enjoyable to listen to at the same time.
-The instrumentals get a bit repetitive but i'm guessing you wanted to keep the whole constant beat going. I liked how you used a tambarine in there to compliment the guitar chords.
-You have a very interesting voice that is great for folky songs. It matches well with the melody of the song.
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Well
-It comes in way too slow as it takes thirty seconds for the main melody to actually kick into full gear. The piano is very static and stays with the same beat for most of the first two minutes. This makes the song feel very dull and uninventive. Also if at all possible make it multi-layered with either different octaves or complimenting rythms to add effect to the trance.
-Overall it's just way too slow and repetitive for me. If you want to really get into trance songs I would suggest making them a little less in length and speed it up a lot.
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Slow fade in was for slow buildup, I like it.
K...
Trance songs are long and slow progressing, I know that much, so making it shorter would be dumb.
Trance isn't supposed to be fast man. When you listen to it it's suppoesed to feel like your in a trance, hence the genre.
If you want fast go listen to some Speedcore or something.
Great work
:00-:38 -Nice calm space intro that was cool and made me want to listen more. The pause gives it a nice break effect to bring you into the song too.
:40-1:20 -I loved the slow paced shuffle/static that you used to build momentum.
1:21-2:03 -I didn't however like how long it actually took to get into the actual instrumentation. Try shortening the overall intro time to bring the key aspect of the melody into the song sooner.
2:04-2:45 -Replaying the melody without any variation makes the song drag on even more. It's unneeded and could of been done without. Would of also helped with the bit-rate that is painfully low.
2:46-2:55 -Interesting robotic part of the song. I know it's used throughout but being played without the melody makes it sound more prominent and bold. I'd like to see something like this in the future.
3:44-5:07 -Very interesting move with the song but it works nicely with the whole theme of the song.
5:08-6:39 -Once again you could of done one theme playthrough and it would of sounded just as good but helped progress the song faster.
6:40-7:02 -The robotic feel is brought out again
-Sorry if I was a bit too nit-picky but I liked how you gave an overall outline that helped me break the song apart and review sections.
-I loved the song overall and like I said it could of been shortened just a little bit to progress the song faster and allow for a higher quality upload.
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Man, I love me my intros...
Anyway I want to keep the beginning the same, but maybe I'll change the partial instrumentation section in the intro to half of the full progression. I'll see how it sounds.
You're right about the repeats: repetition without variation is boring and I regret that now looking back. I'll be sure to replace the current file with a shorter, higher quality upload with some added variation (maybe the lead synth changing its melody to a solo or fancy arpeggiation).
Ugh, the bitrate was painful for me to upload. Would have loved to do something higher than the nasty 128kbps. But, if someone really cared enough for it I could send them higher quality files. So, not as big of a deal as it is a pain in the ass I guess.
Nit picky? Hell, I like it when people pick apart my songs. It gives me something specific to work on! I think from now on I'll be giving an outline, especially if it's a longer song. Thanks for the review!
Owww
-The lead progression is way too loud and brash on the ears. I'm not saying that it's a bad thing but it gets annoying after a couple of times. Which makes what Shellac said so true. It would work better as an annoying alarm to wake you up rather than an actual ringtone. If you ever do make it into a full song make it a little less loud.
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Nice
-I really liked the fast paced first twelve seconds that jumped at you and faded out with a "Pop". This really allowed for the piano to build with an ebb and flow. Meshing brilliantly with the soft, gentle melody.
-You gave this a nice build which seems pre-planned. Everything worked well except for the nasty sounding snare you put in at the end. It does nothing for the melody or the build-up. It's so conflicting with everything else that you did which makes me question why you decided to put it in.
-I would like to see more bass and less treble with additional harmonies to continue making things flow nicely. I really liked what you had at about the minute mark. Bring elements similar to this is what i'm trying to convey.
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Thanks for the review. I've changed much of the build up to the climax of the song. It sounds a little different from what it does now in this preview. But it's still a WIP, and the feedback is great. Thanks!
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