sixflab's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Killer Cirkel!]

Good try

-It's much better than my first video that I submitted here. You at least had some patience involved with making something that was longer than fifteen seconds. You used some interesting enemies in there too.

-The concept isn't very original in that it's just a little fight scene on one background that never changes. If at all possible make a more detailed background in future works that the action moves around and even use many different background areas if you make something larger than the space you use for the picture.

-The main character was thankfully not a poorly drawn stick person but it was a poorly drawn circle thing that could of at least used some floating hands. How exactly does he shoot a gun or hold a sword from his side? The enemies were mostly similar to this except for a few exceptions like the magician and the dragon thing that had a bit more detail. Try making most of the characters used like that.

-Everything wasn't exactly that fluid. It was choppy and slow and items just seemed to float at the same speed without taking into account weight or how it would actually react if done in real life. Again the background was the same with the main character moving around it. Try to have the background change some so it doesn't get bland.

-The sound was a lot higher quality than the rest of the work. It's the main thing that stands out. I'm not sure if you made the sounds or if you took them from somewhere and added them to the animation but good job nonetheless in that department.

-Overall it was a good start to animating for you and I hope you take some time to learn a few things and take even more time before you submit anything else. Effort really shows when you have something that looks really crisp and clean.

-Review Request Club

reinert responds:

thanks for the reweiv and its good im not completly bad at makeing flash movies ;)

[Shark Black: Demo]

Woohoo Shark Black

-I like the little pointer design you created for this. It really fits the whole shark theme you have going. Animating it was a nice little add-in too. I liked the whole layout for this a lot better than the CoolJaw Layout. The clickable items are much larger and contrasting to make them pop out better. It looks really nice too.

-The animating of this is ok. It's a bit choppy overall but you're probably using a low framerate. If at all possible try to have a high FPS to make the animating smoother. The dialouge was difficult to hear since most of it was whispering. Put in subtitles if your going to continue using this dialouge type. The lip synching was only an open and closed mouth and could benefit from having actual mouth motion too.

-You put a lot of extras into this. The backstory in the notes helped fill some gaps in the story that I couldn't figure out from watching the video. Concept art was also a nice addition and it helped me figure out some of the reasons for parts being drawn certain ways. The little Ripples comic gives you a little teaser but it didn't really do a good job at making me want to see more.

-Review Request Club

Celx-Requin responds:

Hello,

It's running at 24FPS, I think the reson why it's choppy has more to do with newgrounds. See my response to coops review about the subtitles issue.
The lip syncing does suck though :(

Thanks,
- Celx

[CoolJaw: P.S. I-V]

Needs some tidying up

-I had some work to do as far as going back to the earlier ones to get back up to speed on the plot for this but I managed to do it after a couple of hours. I did other things in-between each one.

-I liked how you had some of the aesthetic options all in one place at the bottom. It made it really easy to set things up as to how you wanted them according to your preferences. There was also the links to each individual part of the comic. The only problem was it took a while to get through it since it's so tedious to open so many different browser pages for the pop-ups. Try to find a way to clear that up to make it easier to read the earlier comics.

-Once I was able to go through this new installment to the series it was much easier to go through. Like the earler ones you just move from page to page to progress through the comic. You really don't need to change any part of that. You could however adjust where you put the text bubbles to make the picture slides look less cluttered.

-The drawings i've noticed aren't highly detailed but they have that dark feeling to them. The lack of high detail accentuates this feeling. The length of each comic is good too. It's not too long but it always leaves you at a point where you want to read the next one. You do an excellent job with creating cliffhangers.

-So overall the story is great at least to me. Full of suspense and intrigue. You just need to find a better way to link to the old parts of the series. It takes a while to do so the way you have it configured.

-Review Request Club

Celx-Requin responds:

Thanks,
will write a better response later.

- Celx

[VANDL]

Nice

-It's not bad for one of your first works that you've submitted.

-Your paint can character is quite interesting. He sprays a little fast though. Try having the spray painting done in real time instead of it just coming up all at once. It would make the animation longer and much more interesting.

-The movement of the characters are also a bit off and need some smoothing out to look better. Just add more frames in the walking dynamics to make it look better.

-Basically just put more time into your work and it will make all the difference.

snarebws responds:

thanx a lot 4 the help. :) ill try that out on the next one. i agree with what u r sayin, walk cycles need alot of work and i think it wld be cool 2 see how the graffiti actualy forms as he paints it. thanx man

[Sky And Earth]

Just ugly

-The lip-synching was off a little which is most likely becuase of how slow the words were actually being said. It's an easy fix if you just practice it a little.

-The animation was just basic and with practice can also be improved. You only had parts move one way. They weren't very dynamic.

-The story was very short and needed to be a bit longer in my opinion. Just work out a solid storyline and make an animation off of that.

-You obviously have potential since you have some skill at drawing already. Work on your overall animating skill and audio incorporating and you'll have a packaged deal.

-Review Request Club

up-a-notch responds:

thanks man

[Jinas 1: A New Friend]

Great Job

Awesome dialog and character development. And, stellar VO work. I love the rabbit. You can really feel the sense of "wise" and "learned" from the way he talks. Keeping making flashes that you love. Even if the flashes that you love take a lot of your free time up. I think it's great that you want to take some time off and work on your skills too. It really makes me look forward to when you actually start making more flash work and submitting it here.

AloneInTheDark responds:

Thanks!!!